A great paragraph from
Hana's Canvas ;
- she used the simple vocabs to attract readers to feel pleasure when they read it.
- Hana applied to using the process, which is the style that explain one by one the story.
- reading suspiciously, in this line "Look, I need my pills," said Ana softly."
- figurative language: metaphor in this line, "He didn't talk much as he did usually and still as cold as an iceberg."
- She managed to bring the readers into the protagonist world, the conflict with his girlfriend.
- simple words but brings lots of meaning, in love. " I can't have a happy day without your smile, your jokes and witout hearing your laugh,"
There are some aspects that she could improve to make her story more interesting:
- using more figurative languages, such as metaphors, personafications, and simile.
- just put only one emotions in one paragraph to make readers understand easily.
- elaboration is great, but she must command in vocabs to gain the quality of the writing.
There are somethings that
I LOVE in this paragraph:
- author was very honest in their writng and elaboration skills of plot.
- there are some words that Ican used to tackle a woman, one day.
- common story, but they are some moral values, such as be honest, and also believe to each other.
- she tried to to catch the readers by using the common issue, whic is love. GREAT
